Question

Rewrite the following sentences for better audience focus. Be sure not to alter the meaning of the sentences.

1. You will lose customers if you are slow in responding to inquiries.
2. We are thrilled to inform you that your contract has been renewed for another year.
3. Your account (#12345) is delinquent. We will disconnect your service unless you clear your balance.
4. The Writing Center is offering the public an opportunity to attend a free editing workshop.
5. We have more than a dozen retirement plans that we can personalize just for you.

Answer 1

 Delayed response to the customer enquiry may reduce the number of consumers.

 We are excited to inform you that your agreement has been restored for one more year.

 We are sorry to disconnect your account (#12345) except if you clear your dues.

 Grab the opportunity to attend a free editing workshop in the famous writing center.

 We can personalize your retirement plan only for you from our more than dozen retirement samples.