Competency
Apply Concepts of Professional Writing to Prewriting, Drafting, Revising, and Editing.
Instructions
Below are two professional emails. Read through each of the emails copy and paste them to a Word Document. Edit them utilizing the Review tab in Microsoft Word. Please review each email, finding all errors in grammar, vocabulary, spelling, punctuation and professionalism.
After you have completed editing and revising the email, pick one of the two and re-write the email so that it is free of all spelling, grammar and content errors and is professional and informative.
Email #1
From: Tricia Marcus
To: Allison Brown
Subject: Today’s Meeting
Hey Allison!
I am looking forward to seeing you today for our meeting. I’ve
attached the materials needed for our discussion. Let me know if
you have any questions.
Regards,
Tricia Marcus
Marketer Extraordinaire
[email protected]
(555) 545-5656
“Be so good they can’t ignore you.” – Steve Martin
Email #2
To: Bob Pope
From: Gabrielle Mendes
Subject: Job?
Hey Bob, We talked a couple weeks back at the chamber of
commerce event. (I was the one looking for a summer internship and
had a zit on my lip that could have passed for a cold soar. Lol.
Whew. It was not. You’re probably like, “uh.. What?” Maybe that
helps you recall, maybe not. Not completely important, I
suppose.
I’d really like to come work for you at your IT business. You
seemed like a cool person to work for, I liked ur striped pants.
I’m available to start working on Monday, but I am taking my
driver’s test in June and have to study and go an hour and half
away to take it at an easier place cause I’m not a great driver so
I’ll miss a few days. I am also going to the beach with friends for
a week in July. Oh, and my grandmother has bad gas (OMG IT’S
TERRIBLE) and sometimes I have to take her to the doctor.
I’ve attached my resume, it’s the bomb dot com. Let me know if you
have a job opening for me. I can’t wait to play on some computers.
If I don’t respond to your email, I’m always on FB, snapchat or
insta!
Peace out,
Gabrielle Mendes
Email #1 (the revised version)
From: Tricia Marcus
To : Allison Brown
Subject: Upcoming
Meeting
Dear Mr.Allison,
I'm looking forward to see you in today's meeting. Here with, attached the materials needed for discussion. Let me know if you have any questions regarding the materials.
"Be so good they can't ignore you" - Steve Martin
Regards,
Tricia Marcus
Marketer Extraordinaire
[email protected]
(555) 545-5656
The observations in the email # 1 are:-
Email #2 ( the revised version)
To: Bob Pope
From: Gabrielle Mendes
Subject: Resume for the summer internship.
Dear Mr.Bob,
We talked a couple weeks back at the chamber of commerce event
with regard to the summer internship which I'm looking
forward.
I'm interested in joining your IT business. Probably i can start
working from Monday . Meanwhile I do have certain domestic needs
which i will let you know.
I’ve attached my resume. Let me know if you have a job opening for
me. You can reach me on my e-mail.
Thanks and Regards,
Gabrielle Mendes,
[email protected].
(555) 222-5553.
The mistakes in the email#2 are :-
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