Question

Analyze the strengths and weaknesses of each sentence, and revise the message so it follows the chapter’s guidelines. (Excellence in business communication (13^th ed), CHPT 11)).

-Handles all elements of the case professionally; develops and supports ideas using wellchosen examples and creative details.

-Adopts strategy to achieve desired outcome; clearly defines purpose and uses logical and/or emotional appeal effectively.

-Demonstrates a sophisticated grasp of the language; writes in a fluid manner; varies syntax and vocabulary; uses original language.

Message: We know how awful dining hall food can be, and that’s why we’ve developed the “Mealaweek Club.” Once a week, we’ll deliver food to your dormitory or apartment. Our meals taste great. We have pizza, buffalo wings, hamburgers and curly fries, veggie roll-ups, and more! When you sign up for just six months, we will ask you what day you want your delivery. We’ll ask you to fill out your selection of meals. And the rest is up to us. At “Mealaweek,” we deliver! And payment is easy. We accept MasterCard and Visa or a personal check. It will save money especially when compared with eating out. Just fill out the enclosed card and indicate your method of payment. As soon as we approve your credit or check, we’ll begin delivery. Tell all your friends about Mealaweek. We’re the best idea since sliced bread!

Answer 1

We know how awful dining hall food can be, and that is why we have developed our own delivery service called "Mealaweek Club". Once a week, we will deliver food to your dormitory/apartment. Our meals taste greatand cheaper than eating out. We have  pizza, buffalo wings, hamburgers and curly fries, veggie roll-ups, and more!

How to enrol! You sign up for six months, tell us what you want, when you want and we will deliver.

With us, payments are easy. We accept MasterCard, Visa and personal checks. Please find enclosed a card and indicate your method of payment. Your delivery will start as soon as we approve your credit/check.

Kindly refer us to your friends.  

Happy eating and enoying savings.