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WORKSHEET Improving "Thin" Paragraphs NAME horglet The most frequent weakness of paragraphs is "thinness." Add details to develop the follo vicine anderaphs. Write your new versions on a separate page, adding words, phrases or whole wewe ample ime or fact. Remember to follow all the way through, the direction by the topic sentence agree with the point of view in the topic sentence, change it before you revise what follows. 1. Major highways have become war zones. Many motorists show aggressive behaviour of various kinds. There is a higher volume of traffic, going at higher speeds. Worst of all for the car driver are the many trucks. 2. Postal service in Canada leaves something to be desired. Items are often late. Other times mail has been damaged in processing. Stamp prices are high, and for what? 3. Never before has music been so closely identified with the lives of its fans. People who dress in ce tain fashions and adopt a particular behaviour tend to favour one kind of music, or even a specific band. This music then becomes an expression of their lifestyle. and 4. Having brothers or sisters is not easy. You have to tolerate each other's behaviour, and you must E learn to share. But this effort is worthwhile, because it prepares you for your own family life in the future. 5. Voice mail is one of the more annoying aspects of modern life. The caller may spend large amounts of time in a vain effort to contact a person or organization. Tasteless music is forced upon the victim while he or she waits. Sometimes the attempt to communicate is even terminated automatically 6. Pets are expensive. Dogs, for example, require certain shots. They need food, They must be cared for somehow while the owners are away. And as dogs grow older and suffer health problems, veterinari- ans' bills may include bigger and bigger items. 7. School cafeteria food leaves something to be desired. It is heavy in starches, grease and sugar. It tends to be overcooked. Finally, it is often expensive. 8. American television drama has a heavy influence on our own. Many Canadians think CBC series are boring, and would rather turn to American sitcoms or police shows. Thus Canadian producers are tempted to win viewers by imitating the format and style of the American product.

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1. The condition on most of the highways have become pathetic. It has become very difficult for the people to move on the highways conveniently. The motorists are very aggressive on the highways and try to make the life of other people a hell. There is always a higher volume of traffic moving at higher speeds. The worst problem faced by all the car drivers is the truck drivers who drive very recklessly.

2. The services of postal services is highly pathetic in Canada. Most of the times the items are delayed causing inconvenience to the recipient. The shipment gets damaged in-transit which is again problematic. The stamp prices is very high, putting an extra burden on the user's pockets.

3. In today's scenario music has become an integral part of everybody's life and can be viewed so closely with the lives of its fans. It has been observed that people who dress up in certain fashion and adopt a particular behavior, start favoring one kind of music or particular band. Thus the music becomes an integral part of their lifestyle.

4. It is not an easy task to have your siblings. You need to tolerate each others behavior and learn to share things with each other. But it makes a person ready for its future life where again he needs to compromise and share everything.