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The following routine message announces required training for all employees as part of achieving an organizational goal.  The week-long training will take place in October and will require completing some activities prior to the workshop.  This message does not employ a professional tone and is unclear.  Additionally, the message contains several verb errors (tense and passive voice), number usage errors, grammatical errors, spelling errors, and style errors.

 

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To:  [email protected]
From:  [email protected]
Subject:  Diversity & Inclusion Training

 

Good afternoon:

 

CoB Associates will hold ten half day Cultural Intelligence workshops the week of October 12.  As you know, strategic priority is diversity at CoB Associates, and this workshop is an important next step in addressing this strategic priority.  The strategic priority components are.

 

1.    Improving all areas of diversity in the organisation encluding leadership, associates, and interns.
2.    Identifying ways for improvement gender and ethnic diversity throughout the organization.
3.    Develop a culture that welcomes diversity and tolerance.

 

After much research, CoB Associates joined with the Cultural Intelligence Center to collaborate in bringing diversity and tolerance a focal point to all members of our organization.  The workshop is the next step in building a culture and awareness of all types of diversity.  All workshops will take place in HRTR.  Please review the list below for your assigned date and time (scheduled by department):

 

October 12, 8:00-12:00 Human Resources; 1:00-5:00 C Suite

October 13, 8:00-12:00 Accounting; 1:00-5:00 Design

October 14, 8:00-12:00 Sales; 1:00-5:00 Communications

October 15, 8:00-12:00 Consulting; 1:00-5:00 Support

October 16, 8:00-12:00 IT; 1:00-5:00 Makeup session

 

Watch for communications with detailed specifics to your assigned workshop day and time.  This email will contain important instructions for completing required activities prior to the workshop.  The Director of CoB Associates wants members of our organization too join in collaboration with the Cultural Intelligence Center.

 

Thank you for being a key part in CoB Associates achieving this strategic priority.

 

Kind regards,
Kate

 

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Kate C. Grace, HR Director
CoB Consulting Group
Office: 740-555-5551 | Cell: 740-555-5554