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Instructor: Date: Part 1: Revision - Read the following document and identify errors in format, sentence structure, punctuation, word choice, word formation, tone, numbers, or capitalization. Re-write the poorly written message into an effective one, focussing on conciseness, accuracy, positive and bias-free expression, clear of grammar, spelling, and punctuation errors. (20 points) Nanaimo Sports Centre Vancouver Branch 8791 Austin Street Vancouver, BC Y2P 2P8 November 27, 2019 Ms. R. Ferguson Ferguson Athletic Apparel 315 Massey Cr. Port Moody, BC Z6T 3B5 Dear Ms. Ferguson: We're collecting for the local Nanaimo Sports Centre? We have chosen $28.00 as a fair minimum for businesses to give. But bigger amounts would be strongly recommended. Our Centre totally requires your donation. As we speak, about 430 teenagers don't gets to participate in Nanaimo Sports activities unless more money are donated. Nanaimo Sports is a truly worthwhile program. In my opinion, business leaders of any age should support it. I assume you are by now familiar with our organization, but if you've never heard about us, here is the scoop. Nanaimo Sports Centre is an organization for high school youngsters. They find work with local businesses and then form small businesses and then they opperate these businesses. During they operate the businesses they also learn about us running the business. This is good, I think, and we should all help. Hoping to get your substantial donation as soon as possible, Sincerely, William Barnett, President

Answer 1

Question1

November 27, 2019

Ms. R. Ferguson
Feguson athletic Apparel
315 Massey Cr.
Port Moody. BC Z6T 3B5

Dear Ms. Ferguson,

I am writing this letter to introduce you to the Nanaimo sports center. It is an organization that connects youngsters with a local business. The youngsters get a chance to form business and learn about running a business in the process.

In order to continue our operations, we require donations. We have around 430 youngsters who don't get to participate in Nanaimo sports activities unless we have the funding for it. We believe business leaders of any age should come forward to support this cause. Even though any contribution big or small is welcome we have decided $28 as a fair contribution from business leaders .

Hoping to get your substantial donation as soon as possible.

Sincerely
Willam Barnett, president

Question2

Dear Leadership Team,

The public relations department is planning to conduct a video contest across the organization. The content will be a video testimonial about accomplishments, advice, a suggestion from your department. Under this contest, employees can select a method of recording for sending their videos.

As a part of the contest, an email will send to all employees asking from them to participate. Apart from email send, the events will be announced by a poster in all public areas including the cafeteria, washroom, car parking, etc. All employees will be able to send in their nominations along with the video. There will be an initial screening and 10 videos will be selected. The selected video will be reviewed by the judge's panel and three of them will be selected to be put on the company website and will be part of any other marketing and promotion video. The total cost estimated for the entire event is $2500. The result would be announced by 20 Sep 2020.The public relations department will coordinate the entire activities and will ensure smooth running.

Requesting your approval for conducting this event.

Regards
Public relations department